TitanPad - Writing Descriptions

I have heard about TitanPad for the longest time and as the girls have not received their devices, I brought them to the Green Lab for an exercise on writing descriptions. This is an example of what they did: As the girls were still getting used to the platform, I didn't manage to get them all to give one another feedback on the platform because its beauty lies in that different users can give their comments and edit and they would be reflected in another colour. How cool is that?! But I managed to get them to give feedback through another means.

Google Spreadsheet - Quick Analysis + Evaluation

It is the first week for the Secondary One students in my school. To slowly get them into the scheme of things like using ICT for learning, I got them into groups of fours to analyse another group's "spiced up" version of a sentence they have picked out of a box. The objectives of the lesson were to:

1. Pick out how the sentence has been "spiced up" with adjectives, adverbs or even a change of verb.
2. Evaluate that group's "spiced up" sentence in terms of its effectiveness in creating a mental image of the moment being described.

Here's an image of what they did.

A quick analysis and evaluation of an "improved" sentence